(The next five days will be very 5-7-5 courtesy of an expert in the field, Joshua St. Claire. Now, these works may stretch the concept of the Haiku as some of us know it, but the Springs is all about new looks–LA)
the inevitability
of altostratus clouds
robinsong
what’s left of September Camus’s clouds
first things
this theatre
of summer clouds
racing me
across the meadow
cloudshadow
clouds creeping
over long mountain
dame’s rocket
starved asters
cirrus clouds disappear
into the deep east
arcus cloud
wind bending
Queen Anne’s lace
autumn clouds the scent of evening primroses
iron clouds the color of cubicles
snow clouds
a banshee screaming
through the gas meter
the lavender shadows
of the grey clouds on blue mountain
deadline day
clouddark
the black vulture’s silence
fractalizes
Josh St. Claire
(Image by DWB)
Saragun Springs 
I never heard the expression, “cloudshadow” before, but I love it. It is very expressive and pretty; very poetic. This array of haikus certainly did stretch the concept, but it worked very well! Thank you, Joshua, I’m looking forward to more.
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Hello Joshua (Welcome to the Springs this week!)
I do not think I’ve seen too many new takes on the haiku. Your stuff reads well bit by bit and all together. Little pictures gather and tell a story.
Leila
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Joshua
The first thing a writer must be able to do in order to make an effective haiku is to SEE nature, well and truly. Without that initial act of contemplation and deep seeing, the haiku itself is not even a thing. (And it’s crucial to point out that seeing is not only done with the eyes.)
Your focus in these poems is impressive. I often spend time in the Chicago area or wherever I am, cloud watching – they remind me of a Michelangelo painting, or his paintings remind me of them.
You have really captured the nature of clouds in these connected yet separate, stand-alone pieces.
The world is much too disconnected from nature these days, but not all of us are.
Your word choices and line breaks really bring it all home, surprising and accurate. Wonderful work! Looking forward to the rest of the week.
Dale
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