(We conclude this week’s run of tales by Michael Bloor on what happens to be his birthday. Anyone who has been reading knows why we hope to publish more of his work in the future. Happy Birthday Mick!)
Davie Millar paused in the middle of the Faery Bridge, leant on the rail and stared down at the Blackwater. Like a few other things in the town, the Faery Bridge was misnamed. When it was built, it was first called the Ferro-Concrete Bridge, but ferro-concrete had been an unfamiliar concept in the town a hundred years ago.
It was the autumn, and the total official number of UK Covid deaths (including Davie’s granny) had exceeded the Hiroshima bomb fatalities. But that wasn’t why Davie was so woeful: he was sorrowing because he was on his way to meet Big Andy McBride, the town loan shark. Big Andy was barred by the betting companies (Davie could guess why), so it was natural for Big Andy to ask Davie to put a bet on for him. Fifty quid at 25 to 1. Davie, of course, hadn’t been in a position to refuse. Big Andy’s piggy-pink eyes had narrowed slightly as he handed over the fifty quid. ‘Dinna mess wi’ me now, Davie. The last guy that did that wis left tryin’ to pick-up his broken teeth wi’ a broken arm.’
‘Nae worries, Mr McBride.’
It was Davie that was worried. Last night, he’d had just enough cash to take Melanie to the Bond film, but when she’d wanted a (ridiculously big) bag of popcorn, he’d had to break into Big Andy’s winnings. And once that terrifying Rubicon had been crossed, it had seemed a minor matter to blow quite a lot more of Big Andy’s winnings on a couple of rounds of drinks at the King of Prussia and a taxi home. Considering the risk that the events of last night were now posing to Davie’s life and limb, Melanie had proved disappointingly lukewarm. He had to face up to the likelihood that, compared to Seb, the lead guitarist in the regular band at the Abercrombie Hotel, Davie was running a poor second in Melanie’s affections..
Watching a couple of ducks fossicking about in the Blackwater shallows, half a dozen lame excuses of the dog-ate-my-homework variety ran through Davie’s head. He sighed, turned away from the rail and headed across the bridge towards the old mill. His granny had worked at the mill til it closed, like some much else, in the 1980s. Now the building had been converted into bijou flats. The closure and conversion had happened before he was born and he suddenly realised that he had no idea what the mill had produced before it produced Edinburgh commuters. All he could recall being told was that it used to produce a lot of dust, which had eventually killed his grandad. The recollection didn’t improve his mood.
His pace slowed as he headed up the hill to the council houses. He was surprised to see an ambulance parked beside Big Andy’s BMW. He stopped fifty yards away and watched as two ambulance men manoeuvred a stretcher into the back of their vehicle. Davie turned to a nearby neighbour: ‘Is that Big Andy on the stretcher?’
‘Aye, Covid. Serve the bugger right: never wears a bloody mask in the Co-op.’
As the ambulance lights dwindled in the distance, Davie turned back towards the Blackwater. By the time he’d returned to the Faery Bridge, he’d realised that the remainder of Big Andy’s winnings would be more than enough to buy that elderly Alfa Romeo saloon on the forecourt at Macrae’s Car Sales (the unique noise from the Alfa Romeo engine block was one of the sweetest sounds on Earth). Apparently, when Seb The Guitarist needed a car, he had to borrow his mummy’s Ford Fiesta.
And he could maybe make a few quid delivering for the Chinese take-away. The two ducks were now battling gamely upstream.
Biography:
Michael Bloor lives in Dunblane, Scotland, where he has discovered the exhilaration of short fiction, with more than a hundred pieces published in Literally Stories, Everyday Fiction, The Copperfield Review, Litro Online, Firewords, The Drabble, The Cabinet of Heed, Moonpark Review and elsewhere (see https://michaelbloor.com).
Michael
First, I hope I didn’t get your birthday wrong! But even if I did, happy birthday anyway.
Ha! In life the Big Andy’s don’t usually get what is coming to them in a timely manner. But it worked out wonderfully here.
Thank you for the week and we hope to add further work by you soon!
Leila
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Thanks, Leila. This was sort-of-like an internet birthday card. much appreciated, mick
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Ha! this tangled web actually turned into a finely woven travel rug! Poor old Big Andy though, not a good way to go. An entertaining read – thank you – dd
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Thanks, Diane. Glad you liked it. bw mick
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Hi Mick
Happy birthday!
The surprise twist in “And Now for the Good News…” is effective, mostly because of how good you are at portraying your characters’ interior worlds, I think.
The way you present the main character’s thoughts, memories, and imaginings in this tale has a natural flow to it that matches those in all your other stories.
You really have a great way of describing what’s going on in a character’s mind, heart, and soul during important moments in their lives. As such, you’ve got a great ability to capture the overall SPIRIT of a character that is convincing and winning.
Your use of brevity is also impressive. You’ve got the ability to paint the picture of a whole character and his surroundings in very few words.
Your pieces always leave your reader with a fully-fleshed-out sense of completion. There’s never not enough, nor is there ever too much, either. The balance always feels just right.
Great work this week, looking forward to more of your stories in the future.
Dale
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Thanks, Dale. I trust you had good weather for your camping trip.
Glad you liked the piece. Thanks for your kind words. bw mick
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I don’t know if this is the intended lesson, but I’d like for it to be true. Do something stupid, but don’t worry it will turn out right.
As a male person, I sympathize with his dating luck.
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Thanks, Doug. Yep, sometimes dumb luck does indeed win the clapped-out Alfa Romeo. bw mick
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